That was really good we like the suspense and how it turned out to be a dream the only thing is that the font was slightly hard to read but apart from that it is great!
Well done Jasmine and Kirin! This is a really good piece, I love your ending. The last three sentences are AMAZING!! Maybe next time think of more adjectives as you wrote “The wind helps me come closer to the rusty old boats. Suddenly the wind becomes stronger and pulls me closer to the rusty old boats.” Apart from that great story!
Ruby
That was really good we like the suspense and how it turned out to be a dream the only thing is that the font was slightly hard to read but apart from that it is great!
I like your piece of writing especially your
verbs.
Well done. 🙂
Well done Jasmine and Kirin! This is a really good piece, I love your ending. The last three sentences are AMAZING!! Maybe next time think of more adjectives as you wrote “The wind helps me come closer to the rusty old boats. Suddenly the wind becomes stronger and pulls me closer to the rusty old boats.” Apart from that great story!
Ruby