Well done Yasmin!!!!! Your poem is really good.!! The descriptions you used are really good too!! But however check ‘candy cane’ You spelt it incorrectly but a part from that it was fantastic!!
GOOD POEM! The last line doesn’t really make sense you could change it to ‘ Ice freezes in my mouth from the wind’. Otherwise brilliant. By Kirin
Well done, it gives people information about you
from Maddy
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Well done Yasmin!!!!! Your poem is really good.!! The descriptions you used are really good too!! But however check ‘candy cane’ You spelt it incorrectly but a part from that it was fantastic!!
GOOD POEM! The last line doesn’t really make sense you could change it to ‘ Ice freezes in my mouth from the wind’.
Otherwise brilliant.
By Kirin
Well done, it gives people information about you
from Maddy