This is great! Sophie’s favorite bit is “Maybe it dies like a thirsty flower
Or losing all its only power. I (Alanis) liked “Does it appear like a creepy shadow
Or fly away like a frightened sparrow ” Maybe add in the question marks at the end of the question.
this a five star poem. Well done!
Great I loved the way it rhymes and I like the bit “or does it disappear into a midnight cave”
However I think you could of improved on the last line as it was a bit confusing but apart from that it was amazing.
Mae and Brian
Its amazing!! 🙂 I love your use of rhyming words!!!! your description is great!!! One thing, it says ‘losing all its only power’
maybe it would be better if you either drop the ‘all’ or the ‘only’. Its a great poem!!!! 😉
This is great! Sophie’s favorite bit is “Maybe it dies like a thirsty flower
Or losing all its only power. I (Alanis) liked “Does it appear like a creepy shadow
Or fly away like a frightened sparrow ” Maybe add in the question marks at the end of the question.
this a five star poem. Well done!
Alanis and Sophie
Great I loved the way it rhymes and I like the bit “or does it disappear into a midnight cave”
However I think you could of improved on the last line as it was a bit confusing but apart from that it was amazing.
Mae and Brian
Its amazing!! 🙂 I love your use of rhyming words!!!! your description is great!!! One thing, it says ‘losing all its only power’
maybe it would be better if you either drop the ‘all’ or the ‘only’. Its a great poem!!!! 😉
I really love the bit when it says maybe it dies like a thirsty flower
Great poem . Good how it rhymes my favorite line was ‘ Does it appear like a creepy shadow’ but you forgot some question marks.