That was a brilliant poem Lukas and Teon. I really like the description you used and how you made it rhyme to. It was fantastic when you described the Sugar and Tea. There was nothing that i think you should improve because i really enjoyed it . WELL DONE !!!!!!!!!
Well done.Like you poem especially your ending you made your own up. Your similes are great.
Toby and Kirin
That was a brilliant poem Lukas and Teon. I really like the description you used and how you made it rhyme to. It was fantastic when you described the Sugar and Tea. There was nothing that i think you should improve because i really enjoyed it . WELL DONE !!!!!!!!!
I really like the poem especially when the bit says ” Or burns into millions of ashes” Also I really like the bit when it says”Does it disperse”