I like it… But, I could not read it. I had to go right up against the screen just to see the paragraph, but in all fantastic, just fantastic!
could you please turn his into he and also live to life and instead of she think she is a teacher u could put it into she think’s she is a teacher.
-Charlie.C-
Very good! You used a great opener but you next time try and make your work easier to read. You also need to remember your capital letters for names and the beginnings of sentences. Make sure you don’t miss out any words in your sentences. Well done!
Great! It is a really convincing piece of work and it really makes me want August to go to school now. However you have missed out a few words in it so it doesn’t really make sense. Check through it next time so it flows better. Ruby
I like it… But, I could not read it. I had to go right up against the screen just to see the paragraph, but in all fantastic, just fantastic!
could you please turn his into he and also live to life and instead of she think she is a teacher u could put it into she think’s she is a teacher.
-Charlie.C-
I think you did a good job on your writing about august but you need to make it so it makes sense and correct your spelling
Very good! You used a great opener but you next time try and make your work easier to read. You also need to remember your capital letters for names and the beginnings of sentences. Make sure you don’t miss out any words in your sentences. Well done!
Good job. Make sure you double check your sentences make sense.
Great work….. but your paragraph is quiet hard to read and while I was reading it, it didn’t make sense.
Great! It is a really convincing piece of work and it really makes me want August to go to school now. However you have missed out a few words in it so it doesn’t really make sense. Check through it next time so it flows better. Ruby
Great just make sure you double check your sentences. <3