Well done Alex it was brilliant and I liked the way you explained the reader that August should not be home schooled but you did not explain what types of games he can’t play in PE.
Well done Alex you used some very useful words, but you used Mr shuttleworth’s starter so the delivery of the arguement was pretty lacking.:):):):):):)
Well done. This was a brilliant piece of writing and you structure’s it well. However at the beginning you started with a point that wouldn’t intrigue me to read on. Your beginning is one of the most important bits when writing an argument. Make sure it’s better next time.
You added some great points however, you could of started with a stronger opening or rhetorical question e.g Here, I am arguing against home schooling
Do you really think home schooling is beneficial for August?
🙂 Thank you .
Well done Alex it was brilliant and I liked the way you explained the reader that August should not be home schooled but you did not explain what types of games he can’t play in PE.
Well done Alex you used some very useful words, but you used Mr shuttleworth’s starter so the delivery of the arguement was pretty lacking.:):):):):):)
Well done. This was a brilliant piece of writing and you structure’s it well. However at the beginning you started with a point that wouldn’t intrigue me to read on. Your beginning is one of the most important bits when writing an argument. Make sure it’s better next time.