Timmy by Brian

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2 Responses to Timmy by Brian

  1. collr says:

    Very good Brian! I loved your horror in the story. It’s very good but some of the words you had to included were the wrong type of word such as FLY and FLIES. Would you put the liver back if that was you?

  2. meadm says:

    Very good Brian! I liked the what the story is about. Next time try and put some more descriptive words or sentences in your writing. Some of the sentences are a bit jumpy try and make it flow a bit more.

    -Mae

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