There are a few mistakes Harry. But apart from that, it’s a very good story.
i like it but you just copied a few things from red nose day
Harry that was a good post but you forgot about your punchuation
Ilike your writing but you did a space and then you putted a fuul stop. From Samiha.
That was a good piece of writing but you had some mistakes and no capital letter on the last sentence It was still ok.
i like your script good wrok
LOL Harry, you mis-spelled ‘effected’, instead you wrote ‘affected’ which has a different meaning, but other than that you have written a nice story, although you used the red nose day stuff when this wasn’t anything to do with red nose day!!!
Unlucky Harry, you did OK from ilias xD
Its good but needs more commas and capital letters in that, but other wise it was good.
Like Boutheyna said, there are a few mistakes but apart from that it is a really good piece of work and it is very discriptive 🙂
You have made some mistakes but good work harry.
Good work but as everybody has said a few mistakes but really good poem
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There are a few mistakes Harry. But apart from that, it’s a very good story.
i like it but you just copied a few things from red nose day
Harry that was a good post but you forgot about your punchuation
Ilike your writing but you did a space and then you putted a fuul stop. From Samiha.
That was a good piece of writing but you had some mistakes and no capital letter on the last sentence It was still ok.
i like your script good wrok
LOL Harry, you mis-spelled ‘effected’, instead you wrote ‘affected’ which has a different meaning, but other than that you have written a nice story, although you used the red nose day stuff when this wasn’t anything to do with red nose day!!!
Unlucky Harry, you did OK
from ilias xD
Its good but needs more commas and capital letters in that, but other wise it was good.
Like Boutheyna said, there are a few mistakes but apart from that it is a really good piece of work and it is very discriptive
🙂
You have made some mistakes but good work harry.
Good work but as everybody has said a few mistakes but really good poem