Good poem! You are not meant to use slang, also when you typed a question you forgot your question mark.
Sumayyah
Very good Martin you gave me goose bumps
wow martim blown away you have given me a real sence of how bullying is maybe take out the bit bit at the end and change it to day by day bit by bit
Good Tamzin Only a few bad things, don’t use slang Remember capital letters Don’t use a comma for every new line:)
Don’t use too many commas. One tip: don’t use it for every line.
That was brilliant. When I finished it I had tears in my eyes. I loved the phrase “Its broken my heart, bit by bit,” it was beautiful. But you missed out on some punctuation.
Martim that was amazing just remember to not use commas on every line. Apart from that there is nothing else to say. I have gave you a 8/10
Martim I like your poem but you should read back over your work before you publish it.
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Good poem! You are not meant to use slang, also when you typed a question you forgot your question mark.
Sumayyah
Very good Martin you gave me goose bumps
wow martim blown away you have given me a real sence of how bullying is
maybe take out the bit bit at the end and change it to day by day bit by bit
Good Tamzin
Only a few bad things, don’t use slang
Remember capital letters
Don’t use a comma for every new line:)
Don’t use too many commas. One tip: don’t use it for every line.
That was brilliant. When I finished it I had tears in my eyes. I loved the phrase “Its broken my heart, bit by bit,” it was beautiful. But you missed out on some punctuation.
Martim that was amazing just remember to not use commas on every line. Apart from that there is nothing else to say.
I have gave you a 8/10
Martim I like your poem but you should read back over your work before you publish it.