suspense by ALEX.P

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4 Responses to suspense by ALEX.P

  1. hoxhb says:

    Great job Alex i liked the elipses because it makes the reader guessing.
    You should improve on all of the I s
    By Brian

  2. Antonia says:

    I thought that was good you have used powerful words and strong metaphors.it was not very scary and you don’t need to use that many ellipses.

    • pulaa21 says:

      First of all I didn’t try to make it scary but thanks for telling me about the ellipses I changed them into either full stops or words in my big write.

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