thats a great story and so simple but you talked about the boy too much.
I really like this such a creative story but you have a few errors you have made:
1= You used as so much 2= You have spelling mistakes 3= Some bits don’t make sense
But otherwise good!!!!
Good! However a lot of it doesn’t make sense other than that it made me laugh!
You forgot lots of capital letter and full stops but still good.
I got quite confused but it was kl
Great Story Jake! It was Really funny how a little boy was randomly walking along with a gun. And how he shot because he could see your tongue tingle. BRILLIANT apart from the few missing caps and full stops. 😀
accidental space in the middle of a word but good
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thats a great story and so simple but you talked about the boy too much.
I really like this such a creative story but you have a few errors you have made:
1= You used as so much
2= You have spelling mistakes
3= Some bits don’t make sense
But otherwise good!!!!
Good! However a lot of it doesn’t make sense other than that it made me laugh!
You forgot lots of capital letter and full stops but still good.
I got quite confused but it was kl
Great Story Jake! It was Really funny how a little boy was randomly walking along with a gun. And how he shot because he could see your tongue tingle. BRILLIANT apart from the few missing caps and full stops. 😀
accidental space in the middle of a word but good