First sour sweet by Akif

Posted on June 1, 2015 by Deleted User
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4 Responses to First sour sweet by Akif

  1. hasho says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:13 am

    I liked the ending it was very funny

  2. spara says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:16 am

    Great job.
    go through your work because some sentences don’t make sense like (but it my tongue tingle)

  3. doref says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:17 am

    STAR it is really funny!
    STAR you placed some full stops.

  4. lawso says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:19 am

    There are some mistakes such as you did not put a s in Jeff and when Jeff said “Mum can I get the first sour sweet and its called but it my tongue tingle.

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