Hi Babacar
I like your story it is very Intresting I liked the part where papa is a hero.
I think that you need a bit of practice to spell they and need to check your sentence’s make sense.
what did you mean by owed.
from Rene.
Hello Babacar
I really like your characters names. But you need to remember your capital letters and you need to use more time connectives. How did you think of your name?
where did you get the characters from. Write some more next time.
Hi babacar I like your story because it is very funny.What you could inprove is putting full stops at the end of a sentence.
Hi Babacar
I like your story it is very Intresting I liked the part where papa is a hero.
I think that you need a bit of practice to spell they and need to check your sentence’s make sense.
what did you mean by owed.
from Rene.
Hello Babacar
I really like your characters names. But you need to remember your capital letters and you need to use more time connectives. How did you think of your name?