Wow Skye and Orpa you have done a great load of work I liked this story because you have simile’s and metaphors are great in pieces of work.
* You could improve on making more expression because there wasn’t that much information.
* I personally think you could put more of team work because it don’t look like you have.
WISH: I wish that you would put more thinking and time into your work this was a lovely pace of work thank you.
It was a pleasure from Tamzin
Wow Skye and Orpa you have done a great load of work I liked this story because you have simile’s and metaphors are great in pieces of work.
* You could improve on making more expression because there wasn’t that much information.
* I personally think you could put more of team work because it don’t look like you have.
WISH: I wish that you would put more thinking and time into your work this was a lovely pace of work thank you.
It was a pleasure from Tamzin