Brilliant work you forgot to put in a full stop at the end of your sentence. Something you need to work on is you should of read over your spellings because you spelt apolagise wrong and disabilities but well done for trying.
I really liked your writing because you took your time. * I thought you could put some metaphors or similes to make it more intresting.
From Tamzin
Regan fantastic 2 Things -You Did not use capital on 2 of the Maxes But a really good try
By Teddy
thx u lot i will work on my mistakes
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Brilliant work you forgot to put in a full stop at the end of your sentence.
Something you need to work on is you should of read over your spellings because you spelt apolagise wrong and disabilities but well done for trying.
I really liked your writing because you took your time.
* I thought you could put some metaphors or similes to make it more intresting.
From Tamzin
Regan fantastic
2 Things
-You Did not use capital on 2 of the Maxes
But a really good try
By Teddy
thx u lot i will work on my mistakes