Well done Charnae!!! Amazing piece of writing. Your adjectives are brilliant! I love how you end it on a cliff-hanger. I think you could improve by staying on one subject before suddenly changing to another description. Was your feeling scared?
By Ruby
well done Charnae’! I could picture the girl getting kidnapped and the man taking her it was like I could here the foot steps in my head. emotion is frightened 🙂
well done charnae I really liked yours especially her mouth felt like a dessert are you going to be a author when your old try and put colour to the backround yasmin
Well done Charnae!!! Amazing piece of writing. Your adjectives are brilliant! I love how you end it on a cliff-hanger. I think you could improve by staying on one subject before suddenly changing to another description. Was your feeling scared?
By Ruby
well done Charnae’! I could picture the girl getting kidnapped and the man taking her it was like I could here the foot steps in my head. emotion is frightened 🙂
by layla 🙂 🙂 🙂
well done charnae I really liked yours especially her mouth felt like a dessert are you going to be a author when your old try and put colour to the backround yasmin