Great piece of work. Could use less I’s and put a adverb in front of it.
good but you might want to add more openers
good but and different openers
Well done but in the first line you wrote very in the space of two words.
10 is ment to be spelt as ten but overall very good a mysterious. powerful adverbs.
Great plot but you should use some more commas + why did you use [ ] (square brackets)
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Great piece of work. Could use less I’s and put a adverb in front of it.
good but you might want to add more openers
good but and different openers
Well done but in the first line you wrote very in the space of two words.
10 is ment to be spelt as ten but overall very good a mysterious.
powerful adverbs.
Great plot but you should use some more commas + why did you use [ ] (square brackets)