Love the rhyming, really good work. I love “Shone in the dark like an electric eel” really good. But 10 words over. Also, maybe consider doing paragraphs with about three of four verses in each one. It makes it clearer for the person to read.
Amazing work fred
you could of split up the poem a bit more 😀
Nice Fred it’s a good poem but most of the words dont rhyme b ut good for trying 🙂
Really good Fred I like the ending but as it dosen’t all ryhme you could do less paragraphs
Great work but you could split it up a bit.
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Love the rhyming, really good work. I love “Shone in the dark like an electric eel” really good. But 10 words over. Also, maybe consider doing paragraphs with about three of four verses in each one. It makes it clearer for the person to read.
Amazing work fred
you could of split up the poem a bit more 😀
Nice Fred it’s a good poem but most of the words dont rhyme b ut good for trying 🙂
Really good Fred
I like the ending
but as it dosen’t all ryhme you could do less paragraphs
Great work but you could split it up a bit.