Cool nice writing by the way maybe you could of made it a bit more exciting but other than that it was perfect!
Make sure you read your work and add more connectives.
Pleas right formly.
Erdis you need more full stop but really good stuff in that.
Erdis that was Awesome I wish I had that work.
Great puntuation , no spelling mistakes .I think you could put a few more pictures and more writing.
From Tilia and Charlie.C
I like your writting but only you should put more pitures also put more adjetives but its good doh
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Cool nice writing by the way maybe you could of made it a bit more exciting but other than that it was perfect!
Make sure you read your work and add more connectives.
Pleas right formly.
Erdis you need more full stop but really good stuff in that.
Erdis that was Awesome I wish I had that work.
Great puntuation , no spelling mistakes .I think you could put a few more pictures and more writing.
From Tilia and Charlie.C
I like your writting but only you should put more pitures also put more adjetives but its good doh