Well constructed posting but more attention needed to grammar. All the people and their relationship given and mystery began. This would interest me enough to co continue reading if it were the beginning of a story.
You are very imagintive. You have put features into your pice of writing. Try to put in a little bit m ore full stops and captal letters. From Tamzin.
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Well constructed posting but more attention needed to grammar. All the people and their relationship given and mystery began. This would interest me enough to co continue reading if it were the beginning of a story.
You are very imagintive. You have put features into your pice of writing. Try to put in a little bit m ore full stops and captal letters. From Tamzin.