That was really nice Adama althouh noticed that you more wrong at the end and that you repeated presents when you should’nt have, but apart from that It was lovely!
Great work adama, good use of pucuation just remeber to slow down and read your work by thr way love the wow word used also you have of infusiasm to give your self a comment
That was really nice Adama althouh noticed that you more wrong at the end and that you repeated presents when you should’nt have, but apart from that It was lovely!
I also think it’s lovely Adama. Really Well done.
LOVE IT,ADAMA,YOUR ALWAYS KEEPING REAL BUT THE ONLY THING IS YOU COULD CHANGE MOERE INTO MORE!!!!!!!!!LOVE IT!!!!!!!
WELL DONE ADAMA BUT NEXT TIME CHECK YOUR SPELLINGS.
Check your spelling. But apart from that, you’re grandparents seem really kind!!!
THANKS GUYS FOR ALL YOUR COMMENTS PLEASE GIVE ME MORE ADVICE
THANKS AGAIN
Great work adama, good use of pucuation just remeber to slow down and read your work by thr way love the wow word used also you have of infusiasm to give your self a comment
Some advice would be slow down and add some interesting vocabulary.